How to Get People to Actually Read Your Emails
By Jeff Beals
Just like you, I receive too many emails and many of them are mass emails trying to sell something.
The following message showed up in my inbox yesterday under the subject line, “Looking to Connect:”
Hello,
I’ll keep this short and sweet to make the 26 seconds it takes to read it well worth your time… Yes, I timed it.
I work at [Company X] and we help companies like yours get real results from events they organize with our technology platform. I wanted to learn how you handle this process within your organization and see if [Company X] is something that could contribute to you (sic) existing process.
Do you have 10 minutes to see if I can help?
[Name and Contact Info]
Let’s not beat around the bush – this is a terrible email. It’s getting harder and harder to get people to notice, actually read and then respond to our emails. And it’s not just the mass emails we send; sometimes we struggle to get a sole recipient of a customized email to reply.
I don’t like to pick on people, but let’s use this email as an opportunity to make our own emails better. Here are some problems I noticed:
1. The subject line, “Looking to Connect,” gives the reader no compelling reason to open the message and it doesn’t convey any value to the reader.
2. The message starts with a generic “hello” instead of my name. Even when you’re sending mass emails, it’s super easy to automatically insert each recipient’s name using a myriad of available software programs.
3. The first sentence is gimmicky. I assume the writer was trying to say something witty to catch my attention, but it made me roll my eyes. The first sentence is your most important sentence. Instead of gimmicky or throw-away lines such as “Hope you’re doing well,” it’s better to say something impactful that has value to the reader.
4. The middle paragraph is vague. After reading it a few times, I have an idea what the company does but only an idea. What’s worse, there’s nothing about the text that makes me curious to get more than just an idea.
5. The final sentence/paragraph asks for my most precious and rare resource: time. Why would I give this person any of my time when he sent me a generic, vague message that showed me nothing of value?
6. Overall, the message’s biggest weakness is selfishness. It’s selfish because it’s written totally from the writer’s perspective and for his benefit/convenience. Think about it: He talked about where HE works. He talked about HE wants to learn about my company. He asked for my precious time to see if HE can help me.
The best messages, whether they are to a single person or a group of people, are razor focused on the recipient and what he or she cares about.
What was a good thing about the above message? It was short.
When you write emails, use a compelling subject line, address the person by name, economize your words, avoid cheesy or gimmicky lines, catch their attention by saying something you believe they would value, and most importantly, make the recipient the star of the email, not you.
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